Date: 10/29/14 10:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
...Wow. I don't usually like poetry, but that was beautiful and amazing and Lewis Carroll would be so proud of you, I swear. I loved this. It flows so nicely, your wording is fantastic, and I particularly love the 'Once upon a time' at the end of every stanza. You did a wonderful job!
Date: 01/29/14 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the whole "Alice and Wonderland" concept of this poem. It reminds of an "Alice and Wonderland" themed story that I'm working on. (It'll be a long time before I post it on this site because I'm editing the books in the series before this one.) I love the repetition of the line "Once Upon a Time." It adds to the fairy tale theme of this poem. Overall, you did very good.