Date: 06/10/17 08:07 am Title: Alone in the Dark
Solid start. Only things I noticed that I think could be better is:
Cassidy smiled with glazed over eyes at her laptop screen. She typed her final message. Colon could serve better
Cassidy fell on the floor, twitching and raving on the floor.
The audience is already aware that she is on the floor.
I'll try to keep up with this regularly, but I don't often come to this site.